一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy t

一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!
Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy to get a chance to enter the competition.But in fact,I was feeling nervous before I speak.So my mother told me to take a deep breath.Now,I feel relax,so I think it’s a good idea and my mother is great.I have a small family,my father,mother and me,and we love each other.I have some hobbies,such as reading,painting,listening to music; I think hobbies always can make us grow as a person,develop our interests and help us learn new skills.I always spend some of my free time to do sports,and I playing volleyball for my school team.Because I think sports is very important for our health.And I also like going shopping or having a picnic with friends on a clear day,I believe friendship always make us feel happy and relax.So I have lots of friends now.

Hello, everyone.i'am Ann.It is a nice day,isn't it?Here i will give you some information about me.I’m from Xinhua Middle School, and I’m fourteen years old. I am so excited to get a chance to enter the competition. I was quite nervous before this speak. So my mother told me to draw a deep breath.And now, I feel relived,don't you think it’s a good idea and my mother is great? My family consist of three members, my father,my mother and me, we love each other so much. I have some hobbies, such as reading, painting,and listening to the music; I think hobbies can always promote us as a person, develop our interests and help us learn new skills. I spend part of my free time to do sports, and I am now playing a rule in my school volleyball team. Because I think sports are very important for our health. (和also重复了) I also like going shopping or having a picnic with friends on a clear day, I believe friendship always make us feel happy and relaxed（或者relieved）. So I am fond of making friends and now I have many good friends now.(If you are interested in making friends,i trust we can become good friends and help each other.)
This is my introduce about myself,thanks for listening,thank you.
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Hello, every teacher(这样有点生硬，建议改为hello everyone). Allow me to introduce myself.
My name is Ann. I’m from Xinhua Middle School.(这里的and 所连接的没有逻辑性）I’m fourteen years old. I’m happy to get a chance to ...

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Hello, every teacher(这样有点生硬，建议改为hello everyone). Allow me to introduce myself.
My name is Ann. I’m from Xinhua Middle School.(这里的and 所连接的没有逻辑性）I’m fourteen years old. I’m happy to get a chance to enter the competition. Before it starts, I feel a little nervous. My mother told me to take a deep breath.With her encouraging, I feel better and relaxed(系表结构，relax应用形容词或分词的形式）now, so I think I can make myself in the state as possible as I can.
I have a small family, my father, mother and me. Small as it is,we love each other.（家虽小，但我们却相亲相爱） My father and mother often teach me a lot and enourage me in my studying and living.I am grateful for their help. We three support and love each other.
As for me, I have some hobbies, such as reading, painting, listening to music. Hobbies always can promote us grow , develop our interests and help us learn new skills. Also, I always spend some my free time to do sports and am fond of it,now I am playing volleyball in my school team . Sports benefits me both from health and interest. So I like it. Besides these, I also like going shopping or having a picnic with friends on a clear day, to share the enjoyment with my friends. I think it is the best way to strengthen our friendship. I have made many friends throughout my interest. I think I am a happy one.

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I feel relaxed
such as reading, painting, listening to music and so on.
I always spend some of my free time in doing sports ，and I play volleyball for my school team.
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Hello, every teacher. My name is Ann. I’m from Xinhua Middle School, and I’m fourteen years old. I’m happy to get a chance to enter the competition. But in fact, I felt nervous before I speak. My moth...

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Hello, every teacher. My name is Ann. I’m from Xinhua Middle School, and I’m fourteen years old. I’m happy to get a chance to enter the competition. But in fact, I felt nervous before I speak. My mother told me to take a deep breath and i did so. Now, I feel relaxed, so I think it’s a good idea and my mother is great. I have a small family, including my father, mother and me, and we love each other. I have some hobbies, such as reading, painting, and listening to music; I think hobbies always can make us grow up , develop our interests and help us learn new skills. I always spend some of my free time to do sports, and I play volleyball as a member on my school team. Because I think having sports is very important for our health. And I also like going shopping and having a picnic with friends on a clear day.I believe friendship always makes us feel happy and relaxed. And I have lots of friends now.

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