学帮网请大家帮我看看我写的这个短文里面有哪些错误Today,I want to tell you a true story.It happened 3 years ago.At midnight,I was surfing on the Internet.After time,I was a little tired.so I went to bed.I had just lain down,I saw a grea
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请大家帮我看看我写的这个短文里面有哪些错误
Today,I want to tell you a true story.It happened 3 years ago.At midnight,I was surfing on the Internet.After time,I was a little tired.so I went to bed.I had just lain down,I saw a great many of lines that looked like black and white on the top wall.It looked like a bad television. Just then ,I found,I couldn't moved.It was very terrible.
My heart was very fear as a poor child. But after a moment,I could moved.I knew.This was "ghost burden"that people often discussion.
大意是：今天,我想跟你讲一个真实的故事,它发生在3年前,半夜的时候我正在上网,过了一会,我感觉有点累,我去了床上,我刚刚躺下,我看到了房顶有很多黑色和白色的线条,它看起来像一个坏掉的电视机,就在这时,我发现我不能动了,这太糟糕了,我感觉我就像一个可怜的小孩,但是过了一会,我发现我能动了,我知道了,这就是人们经常讨论的鬼压身.
同学,这是我翻译的,你对照看看.
Today,I'd like to tell you a true story,it happened in three years ago,in the middle of the night I was surfing the Internet,after a while,I feel a little tired,I went to bed,I just lie down,I saw the roof there are a lot of black and white lines,it looks like a broken TV,at this time,I found I couldn't move,this is too bad,I feel I like a poor child,but after a while,I found that I move,I know,this is the people often discuss the demons burden.
after time 改成after that time