学帮网帮我看看我的英语广告是否有问题.NEED AN ENGLISH TEACHERHello,overseas!Can You Speak English?I'm looking for an English speaking student as a teacher to help me practicing my spoken English for the TOEFL test witch I'll take next year.Yo
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帮我看看我的英语广告是否有问题.
NEED AN ENGLISH TEACHER
Hello,overseas!Can You Speak English?
I'm looking for an English speaking student as a teacher to help me practicing my spoken English for the TOEFL test witch I'll take next year.
You will get well paid.We can get together to negotiate for a fair price.
Additionally,we can make good friends.I can tell you anything you want to know about China.
I'm looking forward to your calling.
Tel:XXXXXXXXXXX
My Name:Burgess Chen
I'm looking for an English speaking student as a teacher to help me practicing my spoken English for the TOEFL test witch I'll take next year.
as最好改为to be（因为学生还未当教师,用as译为 担任教师职务的学生）
practicing改为practice或practise
witch改为which 或that或直接省略
I'm looking forward to your calling .
calling只要call或phone call或phone number即可,无需动名词
1. TOEFL 的意思是test for English as a foreign language, 因此TOEFL test就多此一举了，后面的test可以不用
2. which，拼成了witch
3. 这句话：I can tell you anything you want to know about China.说不出哪里奇怪，总觉得像间谍似的，不如说I‘d like t...
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1. TOEFL 的意思是test for English as a foreign language, 因此TOEFL test就多此一举了，后面的test可以不用
2. which，拼成了witch
3. 这句话：I can tell you anything you want to know about China.说不出哪里奇怪，总觉得像间谍似的，不如说I‘d like to chat with you about China.好吧，我承认我改的也不怎么样。
不过can的话表示一种能力，就像be able to那样，给人一种感觉就是你知道很多，你有能力告诉他一切他想知道的关于中国的事，别人都不知道。would like的话像是你愿意和他聊聊，愿意说…
4. If you're willing to blablabla,please call XXXXXXXX 好像更简洁一点
明年我也要考托了~准备找个计时器自己练口语呢，加油！
PS：同意楼上的as 改成to be,practicing改成动词原形（help sb. do sth.）
另外那个price太别扭了，一般商品上面表明的才是price，改成rewards，或者hourly wage(如果你是按小时付钱的话)可能会比较好
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