希望英语自我介绍,高人看看有没错误Hi,everyone!I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School.Let me introduce myself.I've lots of hobbies.I’m crazy about writing computer programs.I’ve taken part in the 2008 NOIp c

希望英语自我介绍,高人看看有没错误
Hi,everyone!I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School.Let me introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies.I’m crazy about writing computer programs.I’ve taken part in the 2008 NOIp competition and have got the gold medal.Do you know NOIp?It’s short for National Olympiad in Informatics in Provinces.I also love English because it useful for me.It’s my dream to study abroad.I know that I won’t realize it without excellent English.
This is me,a sunny boy without sadness.

1、Grade 8 Class 8应该是Class 8 Grade 8
2、have表示“有”的时候,通常不缩写,应该写成I have...
3、I’m crazy about 不是很地道,用I'm keen on ...“对...着迷,喜爱 ”比较好
4、have got?获奖用win比较好,建议改为have won.（PS:完成时应该是have+过去分词吧.你用have got?）
5、it useful for me?谓语呢?要加is的.it is useful for me
6、想表达“没有出色的英语,梦想就不会实现”吗?用it指代“my dream”,建议改为“it won't come ture without...”
其他的没什么了,以上仅供参考!

Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form(from) Grade(class) 8 Class(grade) 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let(allow) me introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. I...

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Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form(from) Grade(class) 8 Class(grade) 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let(allow) me introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. I’ve taken part in the 2008 NOIp competition and have got(gotten) the gold medal. Do you know NOIp? It’s short for National Olympiad in Informatics in Provinces. I also love English because it(is) useful for me. It’s my dream to study abroad. I know that I won’t realize it without excellent English.
This is me, a sunny boy without sadness.

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Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let me introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs（be good at programming）. I’ve...

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Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let me introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs（be good at programming）. I’ve taken part in the 2008 NOIp competition and have got(won) the gold medal. Do you know NOIp? It’s short for National Olympiad in Informatics in Provinces. I also love English because it (is) useful for me. It’s my dream to study abroad. I know that I won’t realize it without excellent English. (study abroad, because I know the dream will never come true without excellent English)
This is me, a sunny boy without sadness.
其实写的很真诚 这就够了~

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Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let me introduce myself.
I've got lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. I’ve taken part in the 20...

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Hi, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming form Grade 8 Class 8 in Shuren Primary School. Let me introduce myself.
I've got lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. I’ve taken part in the 2008 NOIp competition and 我won the gold medal. Have you heard of NOIp? It’s short for National Olympiad in Informatics in Provinces. I also love English because it is useful to me. It’s my dream to study abroad. I know that I won’t realize it without having excellent English. This is me, all sunshine and no clouds.
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写的不错，就改了几个字而已！

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Hey, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming from Shuren Primary School.I'm in Class 8 Grade 8 .Allow me to introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. In 2008,I’ve taken...

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Hey, everyone! I’m Hu Yuanming from Shuren Primary School.I'm in Class 8 Grade 8 .Allow me to introduce myself.
I've lots of hobbies. I’m crazy about writing computer programs. In 2008,I’ve taken part in NOIP and won the gold medal. Do you know NOIp? It means National Olympiad in Informatics in Provinces.NOIp is for short.
What's more！I love English very much because the language is very useful.My dream is studying abroad . I know that I will not come true it unless I study English hard.
Now that，this is me, a sunshine boy with a little sadness.

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