请大家帮我改改我的英文日记,what time is it now?it is our vacation.today was the first day of the winter vacation.i think i can do many things thati want to during this time.i can watch the dvd of desperate housewives.i should make full u
来源:学生作业学帮网 编辑:学帮网 时间:2024/05/31 19:24:21
请大家帮我改改我的英文日记,
what time is it now?it is our vacation.today was the first day of the winter vacation.i think i can do many things that
i want to during this time.i can watch the dvd of desperate housewives.i should make full use of my vocation.not only palying but aslo studying.i will make a plan about my english studying.i will go out with my friends.i will go to see my grandmother and grandfather.there are many many'i will'in this vocation.
第三句没人这么说的,应该是I THINK I COULD DO MANY THINGS I WANT DURING THIS TIME.后面的CAN都该COULD,表示能够.“i should make full use of my vocation”应该改为“ i should make my vovation fully-used”,"not only playing but aslo studying"改“NOT ONLY PLAY BUT ALSO STUDY”." i will make a plan for my english study"改“i will make a plan for my english studing”."i will go out with my friends"改为“i will hang out with my friends”."i will go to see my grandmother and grandfather"中建议去掉TO,读起来挺怪的.结尾是完全的中式英语,建议改得平实一点,例如,I will have an unforgetable vocation!
我在美国上高中
what time is it now?it is our vacation. today is the first day of the winter vacation. i think i can do many things that
i want to during this time. i can watch the dvd of desperate housewives. i...
全部展开
what time is it now?it is our vacation. today is the first day of the winter vacation. i think i can do many things that
i want to during this time. i can watch the dvd of desperate housewives. i should make full use of my vocation.not only playing but aslo studying. i will make a plan for my english study. i will go out with my friends.i will go to see my grandmother and grandfather. there are many many‘i will'in this vacation.
只是一个时态问题和两个拼写问题,不错。
make full use of没错
收起
was--is