托福写作 求批改!赏分30,Some peoplebelieve that a college or university education should be available to allstudents.Others believe that higher education should be available only to goodstudents.Nowadays,people graduated from high school woul

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Some peoplebelieve that a college or university education should be available to allstudents.Others believe that higher education should be available only to goodstudents.
Nowadays,people graduated from high school would go to university to study or work insociety.As we know,higher education have higher application,not everyone canget in the university to study.So,the people who implicate by university,will go to work in society to earn money.There have a discussion which is thata college or university education should be available to all students.I am believethat higher education should be available only to good students.There arethree reasons below,and I will use example to support my statement.
First of all,it is not fair to good students if univeristyeducation be available to all students.I have two opposite examples about twostudents.One is a good student who study very hard and always did well in theexam.Another is a bad student who does not want to study and always flight withother students.like I mention above,there are behavie are quiet different.The quality of university vary according to the degreeof effort.So,if they can go to the same quality of university,it is veryunfair to the good students who study very hard.
Second,if any kinds of student can go to university,it willresult a bad learning enviroment so that lots of student does not study very hard.Maybe they will thought:whatever they study hard or not,they would admittedby univeristy.So,they would be lazy in study and play a lot.In this case,the school would lack of talent.Whether have a good enviroment for student tostudy,It is the key that the univeristy whether can foster the qualifiedtalents.I have an example about my friend.He is a hard working student andhis grades was solid when he was in high school.After he stuided in anuniveristy ranked in three in the city that he live,he became does not study.Because,his classmates who live with he in the same domitory always called myfriend to paly computer games with them.At first,my friend refuse their invitation,but his classmates invited he many times so that my friend agree to playcomputer games with them.Over a long period of time,my friend startedaddicted to computer games and don’t want to go to school.Therefore that studyenviroment is really important.
In conclusion.I am not agree that that a college or universityeducation should be available to all students.It not only can lead a bad studyenvironment to student,but also can molder education.
第二个原因太长了。还有想不到好的论点，

.There have a discussion 应该改成there is .这是一个很严重的问题.没有there have 这种说法.I am believe应该改成I bleieve.am是be动词,后面应该跟动词的ing形式.我一眼晃过去看到这两个错误,可能还 没看完,所以不知道还有没有错误.
higher education have higher application,have应该改成has.peple若是泛指的话不用加the,the people who implicate by university这句你是想表达什么意思?我一段段来行不?
I will use example to support my statement这句里的example如果表示特指要加冠词,如the,an.如果是泛指最好用复数.

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