请帮我改一下我的句子语法 附上我的中文翻译 希望可以帮我修改的通顺 谢谢请帮我改一下我的英语句子语法 附上我的中文翻译 若有不通顺 奇怪的地方 希望可以帮我修改的通顺 谢谢拜托

请帮我改一下我的句子语法 附上我的中文翻译 希望可以帮我修改的通顺 谢谢
请帮我改一下我的英语句子语法 附上我的中文翻译 若有不通顺 奇怪的地方
希望可以帮我修改的通顺 谢谢
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以下
1. 在故事一开始时 这位律师只是忌妒他的妻子和同龄的男子在一起 所以感到忌妒焦躁
因为他很久没看见他的老婆 笑的那麼快乐了
但是渐渐的 因为他的自卑和焦虑 所以开始鬼鬼祟祟的监视著他的老婆 并且从城市搬到乡下
他相信因为这样 他便可安定和快乐的和他老婆在一起 但有一天因为他意外的听到和撞见他的老婆开心的和一位年轻小夥子对话 他感到非常的愤怒和更加焦躁 所以便质问他的老婆 他老婆告诉他实话 他并不相信
因为这样他们吵了一架 也因为这样更加深他们之间的不愉快 和他老婆的恐惧 後来因为这样子的恐惧 导致他的老婆失手的开枪把他给杀死了
at the beginning of this story, the lawer is very jealous that his wife dancing with a young men of
her own age, he feel very anxious and jealous, because he haven't see her wife happy very long period of times.After a period of time , because of his anxious and humble getting more, so he began to spy on her,also they move from a city to rural city. he believe that he can be togerher with his wife again,just like before. but one day, he see and hear accidently that his wife happyily have a conversation with a young guy, he feel more anxious and mad about that, because of that. he ask his wife what'was he doing with that young guy, her wife told this lawer everything and truth, but this lawer doesn't believe his wife, so they have a horrible fighting, because of that, increase their unpleasant between them and also increase her wife's fears.At the end of this story she killed his husband accidentily by shooting. Because of this lawer's distrust and wife's fear, cause the tragedy happen in the story, which make the sadest ending.

At the beginning of the story,the lawyer was very anxious and jealous about his wife dancing with young men of her own age,because he hadn't seen her smiling so happily for a long time.But gradually,due to his self-abasement and anxiety,he began to spy on his wife and even moved from city to a rural area.He believed that by so doing he could enjoy a tranquil and joyful life with his wife just like before.One day,however,as he heard and saw accidently his wife having a chat with a young guy so happily,he felt even more anxious and mad about it,so he interrogated his wife about it.When her wife told him the truth,the lawyer just couldn't believe it and had a horrible quarrel with her.As the mistrust and displeasure accumulated between them as well as the increased fears of his wife,it ended up with the tragedy that his wife shot him accidentally by mistake.

At the beginning of this story, the lawer was very jealous that his wife was dancing with a young man asher own age, he felt very anxious and jealous,because he had never seen his wife so happy for a ...

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At the beginning of this story, the lawer was very jealous that his wife was dancing with a young man asher own age, he felt very anxious and jealous,because he had never seen his wife so happy for a long time.Gradually, he got anxious and humble more and more, so he began to spy on her,and they leaf from a city to the countryside. he believed that he can be togerher with his wife again,just like before. but one day, he accidently saw and heard that his wife was talking with a young guy happily, he felt more anxious and mad about that and asked his wife what she was doing with that young guy, her wife told this lawer everything and truth, but this lawer didn't believe his wife, so they had a horrible fight, and this raised their unhappiness between them and her wife's fear.At the end of this story she killed his husband accidentally by shooting. The tragedy happened in the story because of this lawer's distrust and wife's fear, which made the sadest end.
能力有限，好久没有用英文了。

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错点不少啊，只看几句，第一句的后半句有问题，jealous 可以用词组吧，那就别用that ，用that 也可以，但后面dancing 就不对了，因为that 引导从句后面需要谓语动词。he feel,he 大写，然后because 前不应该加逗号…后面还有好多问题，不说了

这篇翻译不够细心，除了错误语法，连简单的性别都搞错，如 her wife、ask his wife what was he doing.......。 还有，这不是写故事，而是翻译，应该尽量忠于原文，不要加入自己的元素。
The story begins with the lawyer feeling jealous and edgy after seeing his wife mingl...

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这篇翻译不够细心，除了错误语法，连简单的性别都搞错，如 her wife、ask his wife what was he doing.......。 还有，这不是写故事，而是翻译，应该尽量忠于原文，不要加入自己的元素。
The story begins with the lawyer feeling jealous and edgy after seeing his wife mingled with men of her own age, and it had been a long time since he last saw her laughing so gaily.Gradually, he started to spy on her stealthily due to his anxiety and inferiority. He also moved from the city to the countryside because he thought that this could help to give him a stable and happy life with his wife. One day however, he accidentally overheard his wife having a pleasant conversation with a young man; overcome by fury and anxiety, he confronted his wife. His wife told him the truth that there was nothing wrong between the young man and her, but he did not believe it.
They had a squabble which aggravated their unpleasant relationship and it also started to create fear in his wife. And it was this fear that finally caused the lawyer to be shot dead accidentally by the wife.

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